From all the llllll's I can tell you're hurt inside by everyone's comments, so looks like you're going to have to go write another poem about this.
yes i should go in my room, play some Beethoven, sit alone and write in my tears haha no...I really don't see anything wrong in what I did, I posted to get criticized on my work, not on me. I'm really disappointed with the reaction, especially since a good majority of the users are either my age or much older.
Did you honestly expect anything different when you posted a poem about the haunting memory of lost love in the Hangout section of a basketball bbs? THIS basketball bbs?? The same bbs that currently has a 3 page thread about vomit on the front page??? Bless your heart...
Come on now, you can't blame him for getting all cha-cha on us. Look at how many freaking relationship advice threads there have been.
BWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!!!! Dude, it sucked. I would definitely post a quick poop thread to up your street cred.
I didn't read it, cause I don't care about poetry, and I know better than to post anything like that here, but some (read: many) of you are freakin' jazzholes. If you're the type of person who blasts a kid for opening himself up then you're probably not the target audience for poetry anyway, and have little appreciation for it, good or bad. To the OP: keep writing if it helps you work through stuff....just don't post it here....
Outside your window I stand, With flaccid penis in my hand, Crying, Hurting, and screaming in pain, Please forgive me, as I leave my love stain. If you add that to the final verse, I'll give it a 3/10. Without that, it's barely a 2.
sorry could help but laugh when i saw the title of your poem. because i thought of this. <object width="425" height="344"><param name="movie" value="http://www.youtube.com/v/l1QYeqUS6C4&hl=en"></param><embed src="http://www.youtube.com/v/l1QYeqUS6C4&hl=en" type="application/x-shockwave-flash" width="425" height="344"></embed></object>
Clutch City1993 there aint nothing wrong with a man writing a poem some of these guys need to get in touch with their inner child before they were taught all this macho crap. It's great that you could put your feelings down on paper like that and if you are feeling some pain over your loss it's all part of the healing process brother. Don't let the BS dissuade you in the future post on!
