Goodbye My Love (My first & only poem posted, tell me what you think) Goodbye my love My heart My crazy little friend Where do I start? How shall I begin? This pain can never mend It all started when we were young No jobs and no bills In my mind you would run My heart you did steal And even at youth Still naive to the concept We knew where we wanted to be We had our whole lives set No we weren't perfect No relationship is I treated you like you weren't worth it Just for the attention you give I regret it, trust me I know it sounds sick To have these thoughts, this paranoia I wish it would quit But something in my mind I know it was wrong How could I leave you behind And still feel you so strong? Now we're older No doubt it's what we believed Grown up, still head over heels A true couple indeed And despite complications Even including our fights In my imagination I still held you at night I know it's too late But I'm seeing a shrink He made my heart break But it's not what you think They call it schizophrenia So call me a skitz Call me the biggest loser For missing your kiss Im so sorry for waiting God I wish you were here To ease my pain And drive away my fears. I just wanna hold you I really can't sleep How can I move on But still my heart you keep? - anonymous
lol no, jus heard some music today, got inspired to write something. if you read the whole thing carefully you get the point.
lol. good ole clutchfans.net community. Not bad man. That's all as a guy I'm willing to say about a poem.
I'm kind of dissapointed in the responses to this thread so far. I guess it's a sensitive subject. If a dude is jacked up in the head so much to write a poem, he has some emotional issues, especially if he has made it to this point in his life without ever doing so before. I saw the OP and thought, "wow this will be hilarious." Except for the bluntness of ima2k, no real gems. I guess people don't want to push to hard or they might become the Myspace killer who bullied that girl into hanging herself on the internet. Anyways, this is officially the gayest thread in the history of BBS's everywhere. Except for maybe this one : http://bbs.clutchfans.net/showthread.php?t=144891 Either way, it has stealed ten minutes of my life.
There's nothing wrong with pounding out a poem and feeling some creative juices...hmmm..criss cross that... very generic and plain...Not a lot of feeling, meaning, I didn't hang on every word to see what happens next...good effort, but needs more cowbell... And why say anonymous in the end when you wrote it?
