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First time Resume-Is this good?

Discussion in 'BBS Hangout' started by LooneyToon, Sep 27, 2004.

  1. LooneyToon

    LooneyToon Contributing Member

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    This is the first time Im writing a resume. This will be a very important part in getting me this job. What do you think?

    Qualifications

    ð Honesty. I am truthful, trustworthy and loyal to my employer.
    ð Heart. I have a desire to pursue a higher position with the company.
    ð Experience. Working various positions in the store, I’ve studied what it takes to be a winner.
    ð Leadership. Fellow employees in my department respect me as a leader, providing assistance and knowledge to the new employees.

    Education

    June, 2001 - May, 2002
    Edgecombe Community College (ECC)
    Rocky Mount, NC
    Received my GED in November, 2001. Continued my education with ECC in 2002 with studies of Business Administration. I had to remove myself from school due to relocation in Houston, TX where I started my Walgreens career.

    Work Experience

    May, 2003 - Present
    Walgreen’s Drug Store
    Houston, TX
    My current position is a Photo Specialist. My primary responsibility is to provide great customer service, and that includes processing customer orders in a timely manner, assuring the best quality product, and maintaining a clean and safe work environment. My previous position with Walgreen’s was an overnight Service Clerk. I helped get all merchandise out on the floor, manage overstock items in the stockroom, unloading the delivery truck, and assisting customers.

    February, 2000 - April, 2003
    Brent’s Home Improvements
    Pinetops, NC
    I was an Assistant with this company. I helped the owner in various home improvement jobs around the state.
     
  2. DonnyMost

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    Try to use more quantitative things, not qualitative.
     
  3. MadMax

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    Looney --

    looks fine to me. this is an early resume for a young guy...when you're in that spot, you need to put some personal attributes like you did. as someone who goes through resumes all the time, i think this one does the trick.

    what kind of job are you submitting a resume for?
     
  4. drapg

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    "various home improvment jobs"

    be more specific. detail what type of work you did, so your skillset looks more broad.

    did you shingle roofs? place tiles?

    what kind of equipment did you learn to use?

    as was mentioned, more quantitative information is necessary.
     
  5. Mulder

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    avoid using "I", just make declarative statements. They know who did them.

    I had to remove myself from school due to relocation in Houston, TX where I started my Walgreens career.

    Uh, no. Unless you seriously left school and moved to Houston to work at Walgreens, I would change this. The more likely scenario is that you left school for other reasons and then moved to Houston and then found a job at Walgreen's.

    I would suggest, "Left school to move to Houston, TX."
     
  6. LooneyToon

    LooneyToon Contributing Member

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    I am applying for an assistant manager job at Walgreens.


    Well, I would've described my previous job more but I heard a 1 page resume is better then 1 page and 1/8 of another page. Thats the reason I didn't go more in detail.
     
  7. LooneyToon

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    "I had to remove myself from school to relocate in Houston, TX to find immediate employment, where I started my Walgreen’s career."

    "I was an Assistant with this company. I helped the owner in various home improvement jobs around the state. We shingled roofs, pressure washed houses, and renovated homes."


    how is that?
     
  8. yipengzhao

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    mulder, you're the man.

    that's the one thing i would change about it too. however... he's applying internally at Walgreens... so it may or may not matter. but as a general resume, yes that's a good change.
     
  9. MadMax

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    good luck, man!!! let us know how it goes!
     
  10. LooneyToon

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    In the back of my mind, I feel Im getting my hopes up. My age is going to hurt me.
     
  11. MR. MEOWGI

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    Could you change the point size or just move some stuff around to make it all fit? Or maybe using more bulleted lists?

    June, 2001 - May, 2002
    Edgecombe Community College (ECC)
    Rocky Mount, NC

    Could be:

    Edgecombe Community College | Rocky Mount, NC (06/2001 - 05/2002)

    (1 line vs 3 lines)
     
  12. Mulder

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    why thank you. I have found that my writing as well as my general speech pattern has changed a lot since I started law school.
    Their getting inside my head.

    It feels... a... little... weird.

    I would change it to:

    "Relocated to Houston, TX to find immediate employment, where I started my Walgreen's career."

    Just make sure that you have subject verb and tense agreement throughout...
     
  13. MadMax

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    maybe...but if you don't try for the job you'll never know. apply now...if you don't get it, you should be in line down the road!

    hey...you helped me out there one night finding chimney sweeping logs. i should have called your manager then and told him how helpful you were.
     
  14. BrianKagy

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    You probably ought to take out anything that can't be quantified.
     
  15. Mulder

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    Agreed. You've worked all the jobs in the store, right? List the duties for each under skills and qualifications.

    I bet if you were to spell it out there is a lot of detail that goes in to photo processing, cashiering, stock, opening the store, closing the store, etc.

    Management positions are required to know all the ends and outs of every position and be able to explain to new hires how each position works and what the duties are. Show them that you know that. You can do it!
     
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    If you are applying for a job in retail...use phrases that state your intentions to customer

    Example: Excel and strive for TCE (Total Customer Experience)


    Also, giving your opinions about yourself only go so far..you need facts to back them up:

    Example: "Leadership. Fellow employees in my department respect me as a leader, providing assistance and knowledge to the new employees"

    Instead, mention something like: Leadership: Led fellow employees in implementation of XXXXX or Provided employees with empowerment through knowledge...or stuff like that.

    Give examples of how your employees respect you as a leader...don't just say that you are a leader.

    Facts...examples...projects....specifics...
     
  17. Mulder

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    OBJECTIVE

    Assistant Manager Position with Walgreen's; Houston, TX

    Qualifications

    Versatility, Adaptability, Loyalty, Outstanding Customer Service, Respected by other employees.

    Education

    June, 2001 - May, 2002 Edgecombe Community College (ECC)
    Rocky Mount, NC
    GED (November, 2001.)
    Business Administration major.
    Left program to seek employment in Houston, TX.

    Work Experience

    May, 2003 - Present Walgreen's Drug Store
    Houston, TX
    Current position, Photo Specialist. Primary responsibilities are to provide great customer service, processing customer orders in a timely manner, maintain strict quality control standards, maintain clean and safe work environment.
    Previous position, Service Clerk, Overnight shift. Duties included maintaining proper product quantities on sales floor, managing overstock items in the stockroom, unloading the delivery truck, and assisting customers.

    February, 2000 - April, 2003 Brent's Home Improvements
    Pinetops, NC
    Home Improvement Assistant. Assisted Owner with home improvement projects around the state. (This is important: List each and every duty that the job entailed. It sounds like a jack of all trades position. That's good. It shows that you are versatile. That you can adapt and overcome new and different positions. Did you answer phones? Was it a multi-line telephone system? Did they have a fax or copy machine or computer? If a computer did they use Excel or MS Office? Did you supervise any workers? Did you place orders? Do inventory? Travel? Arrange Travel? Hotel, flights? Did you do any accounting or books at all? )
     
  18. Mulder

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    One more thing. Do customers ever comment on your service or the job you do (in a positive way)? If so, make sure the management knows about it. Ask the customer to fill out a comment card or drop an email to your boss. Don't go overboard or weird the customer out, but these are important with corporate types.
     
  19. synergy

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    list those qualitative factors in your cover letter. cover letters are awesome.
     
  20. DonnyMost

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    Yeah, that's a good idea.

    Those things being listed at the top looks like you're trying to join a band or something, it need to be written out in more of an essay format.
     

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