[Strip Club Story] My Latest Piece

Discussion in 'BBS Hangout' started by OrangeRowdy95, Dec 13, 2008.

  1. OrangeRowdy95

    OrangeRowdy95 Contributing Member

    Jul 15, 2007
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    So for my final story for one of my classes, my partner and I finally decided on an entertaining topic. Feel free to read it here or click the link to check it out. Enjoy!


  2. g1184

    g1184 Member

    Jan 28, 2003
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    Up the stairs and past the dancers' dressing room ... in case you haven't submitted it yet.

    I like that you guys followed up on Tidd's claims by talking to the police officer, checking to see how much community work he actually does, and talking with the girls to see if they like their jobs.

    I just feel like there's no resolution at the end ... the problem was that they're under a microscope and are judged harshly ... the business might not make it. You present the evidence that shows why the criticism may be unwarranted but never sum it up in a conclusion at the end.

    Otherwise, I liked it ... it's interesting, good job.

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